final piece evaluation

THE SPITTING CHIP FRIER

Scene 1:This scene is where Senior Onion starts his thought process too kill the civilians of the  chip frier.

Scene 2:This is where he and his vegetables descends in a hot air balloon. whilst the innocent civilians look confused at the basket filled with veg. 

Scene 3:This is where Senior Onion direct his veg too "kill them all" and the civilians of the chip frier aren't of an aggressive nature therefore didn't fight back. Hence, getting captured by Senior Onion. 

Scene 4:This is where Senior Onion takes the civilians. 

Scene 5: the veg are about too push the civilians down the compost whole whilst Senior Onion looks on. 

Scene 6:This is the entrance of Chap and his men who show up and are wanting too stop Senior Onion.

Scene 7:The fight scene where Chap tackles Senior Onion.

Scene 8: Chap and Senior Onion herbal down the compost whole with no signs of stopping. 

Scene 9: The compost whole erupts due to the sheer velocity of Chaps and Senior Onion decent. 

The moral of my final piece is that you should always do the right thing which fits in with my age group well (4-8) as it teaches them right from wrong at an early age and i think if id of put a more meaning full moral behind it id of had too of changed the age group as a younger audience may struggle with understanding.

Overall, my final piece could of been improved by  having a front cover and a back cover, having more scenes to fill in some of the gaps in the story and maybe more dialog. The front cover would of added more visual engagement toot he viewer and would of told the viewer more clearly what the story is going too be about. The additional scenes will make sure the viewer will stay engaged with the story and not get lost or confused. The dialog now this is a confusing place as if i added too much the my target audience would of become confused and bored yet if there wasn't enough then they wouldn't understand whats happening and also become bored, so if i were too add more dialog i would of put it on the 4th and 5th scenes just so there was no confusion when reading. 

Any future plans would be too create a series of comic strips which contain the same characters and morals but with the improvements above.